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Soft as whispered silk
wrapping around my skin like smoke~
Intangible and fleeting~
Grasping for it leaves empty hands. bleeding
clenched in frustration
until with heavy sigh,
resigned to stop moveing, stop trying
to reason with your lies and then...
to let go with peace.
Do not bemoan sirens calls.
Lies of love rejected, nor old lovers past.
Words are smoke you cannot hold.
Do not speak at me
of betrayals to ghosts
who first themselves betrayed.
Who could not be solid, walking into mist, silent.
Do not assume to know my faults,
the suffering or my pain.
You know not the hell
Nor the heaven of my depths.

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greenmountaineergreenmountaineerover 10 years ago

"Words are smoke you cannot hold" is a great line. "with heavy sigh" sounds like a cliché. I'd ditch it. I'd also ditch the first 3 lines. "Grasping for it leaves empty hands" is a great opener, and you answer what "it" is pretty quickly. "bleeding/clenched in frustration" projects a compelling image. "bemoan" feels forced to me.

I enjoyed reading this, and I hope you found my comments worth thinking about.

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