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Click hereIf fold she must as her master did decree
let it be with grace and poise.
Each dainty toe, crushed now
to fill a doll sized shoe, describing
delicately a fragile flower
petals unopened paper thin.
Breasts but twin buds,
beneath each pleat
creased and placed just so.
China doll compliant always to a higher will
But this one really brings out your particular voice. There's this wonderful shell, very delicate, over an undercurrent of anger. Really good work.
I liked it too, soft and sweet. I do agree with Eve, but UYS, you're a wonderful poet, with a gentle touch.
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Last line is fantastic. Some other good lines: fill a doll sized shoe/beneath each pleat creased and placed just so. There are parts of the poem that could be improved: Each dainty toe/fragile flower/petals unopened/Breasts but twin buds -- kind of cliche phrases.
has been recommended in the New Poems Reviews thread today on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read!