- Erotic Poetry
- Circumference of Us
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"I'm caught
in your concentric
circles."
from Madrigals
by Federico Garcia Lorca
Dark a moment ago
before I awoke
to your breast in silhouette
shadowed in twilight.
I imagine my form
its shadows curving over you
concentric darkness
slowly covering you.
Before the first fingers
of sunlight caress us
we slip in our faint sphere
encircled in sensation.
Later we roll in sunrise,
slip from each other's arms
still curled from the night,
in the circumference of us.
- COMMENTS
unapologeticalmost 17 years agohttp://forum.literotica.com:81/showthread.php?p=23460385#post23460385
twelveoonealmost 17 years agoencircled in sensation//Q. why (en) in encircled? Wondering about that call?/I don't mind the double you, reasoning the importance of the "you" in the context of the message.
WickedEvealmost 17 years agoI tend to read too fast and expect too much from most poetry. This poem needs a slower read. It's actually quite lovely. The last strophe is especially good. I have one suggestion. I would drop the second "you" in the second strophe. It bothered my ears to hear two of them so close together. I have a feeling this could just be me, but I thought it was worth a mention. You do write wonderful poetry.
