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Click hereVibrating
my quivering
clit.
Rosebud lips
peaked
open,
begging
for more.
So much
more.
Round
Round
Dipping round.
Grinding hips
shimming
a shake.
Hotness
seeping.
Roving tongue
teasing, while
pouty lips
get their
pleasing.
Tongue
of silver,
turns
forked now.
Clit,
split
lickity split.
Spit
Spit
Spit
Wow! This is just awesome. A few very effective choice words, mmmm.
Love it.
Are we talking fast food here? Finger lickin' good. Very fun and very hot read RF.
ty,bd
A good Sunday wake em up...
(I know - I'm running late - tastes good anyway)
Hot poem! I loved the way the words flowed in your poem, mirroring the images you created. Great stuff!
and repetition add a pace to the poem which is effective, but I found the wording more about mechanics than sensation or intimacy, more telling what is happening than showing what is being experienced. I read a narrative rather than being drawn into the words. I think if rather than describe what is happening, try to express what is being felt emotionally and physically, if you work toward that you can draw your reader into the poetry.
jim : )