- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Crocodile Tears
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Mesmerized I watch,
in silence.
Eyes swim with tears,
the single droplet escapes.
Leaving a trail,
of slug-like silver.
Down cheek
to tremble,
cling on chin
and take flight.
Free at last,
no resistance.
Pain like
a starburst,
on impact,
melts into the breast.
Repeating, refrain,.
over and over again;
“I am sorry
Forgive me
I am sorry
Forgive me”
Is it real or
only a test.
- COMMENTS
WickedEveabout 17 years agoHi. I read your poem and I have to agree with vampiredust. Keep writing. You're doing a good job. :)
Anonymousabout 17 years agobut could be tightened further. The feeling has been done well but you need to avoid stale language and cliches. The title is cliched, for example.
I liked the lines:
"Leaving a trail,
of slug-like silver"
More of that is needed in the poem.
Still, a good start
