- Erotic Poetry
- Crush
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There were certain
disturbances:
Skirts high on the thigh,
front-row desks and
that shadow between
the knees;
Questions showing
the definition of the torso
and the upraised arm;
Sojourns to the office
at dusk
to pose shyly--
fingered tress in golden
lamplight between door and frame--
and the door closing;
And of course
learning, passion,
bright eyes and
a vernal splendor
of poetry.
- COMMENTS
JamesCiriacoalmost 15 years agoAuthorI'm content with diversity of opinion on the issue, but for what it's worth, I've used "vernal" in this poem because I imagine these two at the beginning of a fruitful creative and sexual relationship. The woman is also meant to be young, but I was a college professor, so "young" for me would still be of legal age. Special thanks go to Tzara for his display of erudition.
Tzaraalmost 15 years agobecause, for me, besides the obvious sense of the word is the symbolism—how the "v" evokes Venus (as in Anaïs Nin), the little "V" of the mons (I hope I am not too much channeling Pynchon).<p>
I like the use of indents, which often are irritating, but used effectively here. And the line breaks are a poem in themselves.<p>
Oh, yeah. Welcome to Lit. ;-)
bflagsstalmost 15 years agoI don't care if you're talking about an adolescent. Good poem.
annaswirlsalmost 15 years agohttp://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?t=254157&page=137
greenmountaineeralmost 15 years agoVery evocative, and I particularly like the motion of the narrative. I'll assume she's of legal age, of course. I might have left out "vernal" for that reason.
