- Non-Erotic Poetry
- deja you
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cold and wet
merely a state of mind
do you mind?
watch me unwind
winding down a
spiral of
sugar coated
loveliness
my lovely mess
whom ill kiss
despite bared teeth and
a feigned aloofness
that i have yet to see
- COMMENTS
variable Xyover 18 years agoReading this causes a visceral reaction. Something inside catches on the ribs, holds and then finally, I breathe.
…it's not just a kiss
Anonymousover 18 years agowatch me unwind
winding down a
spiral of
sugar coated
loveliness
my lovely mess
Really good lines. The ending was superb! Thanks for the read.
jthserraover 18 years agoyou continue to be one of the most interesting and innovative poets here. More than a state of mind, just a touch beyond your consciousness. Well done...
jim : )
McKennaover 18 years agoThis poem appealed to my appreciaton of the darker side of life because of these four --and in my opinion-- critical lines:
"my lovely mess
whom ill kiss
despite bared teeth and
a feigned aloofness"
You handled the words very well, portraying something that felt incredibly honest. You accomplished a lot in a little amount of time. I felt like I was moving along with with the poem; Nice movement, well done.
