- Non-Erotic Poetry
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Click hereYou put this fever in my heart.
Gave me this wild heat in my soul.
You're melting my ice.
For you-I feel.
Did you know
you can live without fire?
It can just slide away
but you still live.
You can lose everything.
Lose all passion and joy.
Did you know
you can live in a vacuum?
I used to burn so brightly.
I used to feel so much.
I leapt into every experience.
I dove through my life.
And then, slowly, I didn't.
The fire dimmed to beaten down coal.
And then to feel-it hurt.
To leap meant to fall back bruised.
I became this quiet thing
who no longer burned.
She just bled silently
and no one saw or cared.
And I learned hateful lessons.
You can live when you'd rather not.
Life doesn't let go easy.
Even when the fire is dying.
But you changed that.
You gave me back my flame.
I think I'm me again.
And it's to you that I leap.
Into your arms and your mouth.
I want to dive into your essence.
You simply amaze me.
You are my forever One.
Do you know
I was terrified at first?
Suddenly I was feeling again.
No more ice to protect me.
I knew that glacier chill so well.
It kept me unfeeling and safe.
You can't be hurt
if you refuse to feel.
But I couldn't stop thinking
about the words I said to my friend.
You will never be shattered
because you never let another in.
It made me have to think.
Do I want to be always safe
or do I want to leap
and chance feeling again?
I thought about something
that my momma always said.
Don't love someone you can live with.
Love the one you can't live with out.
I'd been coasting with the live withs.
I wasn't letting any man get close.
So I had to make a decision.
Could I do it for real?
It didn't take long to find the answer.
I don't want to live without you.
I really do love you.
How could I not?
You are all those dreams and ideals
I had to put aside so many years ago.
You are as right for me
as I hope I am right for you.
In your arms I am at home.
You are my safe refuge.
My life can be exploding around me
but you are the good that keeps me going.
Do you know
how deep you reach me?
Do you know
I feel you heart and soul?
There's very little ice left.
Now there is mostly just katt.
And she's not afraid any more.
She's just loving her forever man.
- COMMENTS
duddle146over 17 years agoLovely rendering relating a rocky relationship that in the end is heartwarming in their affection for each other. I loved the last line.
She's just loving her forever man.
beautyandwineover 17 years agoI really like this, if only because I know the feeling all too well. I particularly liked this gem:
"Into your arms and your mouth.
I want to dive into your essence.
You simply amaze me.
You are my forever One."
I agree, however, that cutting it down and playing with the word choice abit could make it even more powerful.
LeBrozover 17 years agoTwo small points ~
Replace glacier with glacial
and
ruthlessly edit; cut down to half its size and it'll be more potent. By the mid-point I was wondering if this was ever going to end; it all started sounding the same. You can say too much and lose your reader. Nice sentiments though.
