- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Faces
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Faces
Mindless, ever-blending faces.
Faces with tears streaked down curving cheeks.
Faces with anger glowing from frightened eyes.
Faces.
The faces tell nothing, but the eyes tell all.
They tell of fear and pain and loss and anger.
They tell of betrayal of the most unbearable kind.
They tell of the exquisite pain that only children bear.
The confusion.
The helplessness.
The inability to do anything other then love and hope it is enough.
Knowing it never is.
Cowering in fear.
Praying for love.
Love of a parent.
Waiting for the next blow to fall.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 17 years agoThis has potential but I see several areas of tweaking, from the line spacing to too much repetition on some words. It can be trimmed down and become more potent. I've done some quick tweaking and am sending you for your consideration just one possible way it could have been done.
Amyfriendabout 17 years agobut I disagree with the line "The faces tell nothing, but the eyes tell all."...Both infact tell their own story, the mouth and how the lips are held (does he want to speak/is he mad/is he something else) the mouth can be closed but it may be pulled to one side and dimpling the cheek. Sometimes the mouth and nose maybe tweaked upwards in a 'I don't know appearance' and on and on. Truly reading a person includes the entire body language and not only the eyes, although I have to agree that the eyes do tell so much...Thanks for the fine poem.
