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Click hereSmiling at me,
Your lips form words,
But are they the truth?
So many times you’ve made promises,
And so many times I’ve been disappointed,
It’s so hard to comprehend what you mean to me,
You say you love me and yet I can’t reply,
Honestly I don’t understand what I’m feeling,
You take a step closer,
Involuntarily I step away,
You look at me, hurt flickering in your eyes,
I glance away,
Hating the power you still have over me.
I wonder if I’ll always feel this way.
Soon your gone and it’s like,
You weren’t ever there,
I gaze out the window,
As I remember,
Everything you meant to me.
Sighing I turn away,
My heart burdened with sorrow,
These are just some of the feeling I have for U.
In a contemplative mood ~ uncertain and unsure of her affections she sighs - turns away.
I'll see how your other submissions today hold up but this, so far, is one of your weaker pieces. The 'U' device doesn't seem to serve much of a purpose, more like a literary smiley face. And "Soon your gone" should probably be, "Soon you're gone" (I know, picky, picky). Prune the distractors and your message comes through stronger.