- Erotic Poetry
- Flirtatious Notions
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Click hereStarving for adventure, flirtatious notions, alluring,
your provocative dress, risque dance, seductive kisses
accelerated my heart, recalibrating it from the start.
Caressing bodies, necking, heavy petting,
stretched out on the bed, taking a journey.
Clothes thrown, heads bent back,
salivating mouths and eyes closed.
From the sheets of the bed to the bedroom floor -
fingers trembling, arched backs, inducing.
Embracing; laced, grazing each others bodies
from the cushioned floor to the hard-ridged wall.
In a faithful frolic, burning red, fornicating
all night long in your tender embrace - Loved.
© Copyright 2009
- COMMENTS
Honey123almost 14 years agoI like this poem...there are a few lines which stand out, I especially love, "stretched out on the bed, taking a journey", I think it brought your first line, "Starving for adventure" around.
Great job...I can't wait to read more~
nerkalmost 14 years agoI think you've got a great, sexy set of images and phrases here.
"From the sheets of the bed to the bedroom floor -
fingers trembling, arched backs"
This in particular stands out as tasty, probably because it uses a few of my favorite words.
I would reconsider recalibrating and fornicating, both of which struck me as being fairly detached and clinical, in what is otherwise a poem of great immediacy.
PandoraGlittersalmost 14 years agoI liked some of your word play, especially . . . "laced, grazing each others bodies" and I realize you are giving us a string of actions but I think this might be stronger if you rewrote it as sentences and then made it a poem afterward, you know? I'd also watch out for using metaphor and then abandoning it (comparing the heart to an engine). Metaphor works really well if it is a thread that runs through the whole poem. It is also really tricky though because if you use a metaphor other people are familiar with rather than something sort of new then you wind up using cliches so try to make your figurative language as novel as possible. Surprise us with a new comparison you haven't heard before.
I think you have a good start here. Very sexy poem. :)
