- Erotic Poetry
- For Danny
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What leaves and waves control the magnet math
that vibrates visibly around your skin
and what's the darkness of that awkward path
you walk, those nights
beyond the lights?
Who is the right black rose, the proper wheel
that spins you safely into strangers' arms
and back across the border to the real
under the dark
a perfect spark?
I know you fear the chaos that surrounds
that rage, the judgments of the world
that force you to rebel against the grounds
of moral fear
and end up here,
in these disguises of a man condemned
instead of freed, as you are, from the bond
of boxed assumptions, making you defend
a natural need
to hunt, and feed,
the hunger of a god unpoisoned, right
in wanting, right in his escape
from cornered ethics born of simple fright.
Don't be beguiled,
don't fear the wild.
- COMMENTS
twelveooneover 16 years agoInteresting structure, would like to know why? At first glance it looks like to serve a rhyme scheme AxABB, instead of just AxAx, it may suffer a little because of it.
LeBrozover 16 years agoAdding to what Ange said, this feels very much like writing inspired by a particular image or drawing. It's very compelling, almost forcing the reader to create an image in his mind. Which is, after all, part of what good poetry consists of; the other being to create a feeling in the reader's mind.
Angelineover 16 years agoThis one is a bit obscure without an image or other info to help place it in perspective. But the writing is very powerful. It's not an "easy" poem to understand right off, but then who says poetry should always be easy? :)
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