- Erotic Poetry
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Click hereWith the gentle immorality
of your bituminous kiss
my iron will alloys
with your open, accepting atom
and I there am made impervious
Be I now bar or blade
you will bear my steady weight
for I am hard in my patience
and know not if I build
a tower or a cage
- COMMENTS
KOLKOREover 16 years agoLast three lines are beautiful: "for I am hard in my patience/ and know not if I build/a tower or a cage". The imagery beautifully borrows from the man's work and ties them to the relations for some subtle suggestions.
ghost_girlover 16 years agoyour poem has been mentioned in the New poems review at the poetry discussion forum. Thank you so much for posting your work.
http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?p=24416985#post24416985
ghost_girlover 16 years agoexactly how to explain why I like this, but I damned sure do!
It is intelligent, but in a different way. I love the subject matter. My hubby is a welder who specializes in wrought iron and I have written several poems for him.
I will say it again, this is exceptional poetry for "this place."
I truly hope to read more from you.
