fortuna favet fortibus

A poem can be both explicit and well written if it's handled right. I like a lot of what you write, but I still find myself wanting you to go back and do little edits here and there, but then you may end up with a poem that's not you.

I do agree with YDD about the stench.

This poet tends to write with a tough, "raw word" style.

Nothing wrong with that.

It has an audience,

especially on a forum like Literotica.

In this work he has used his raw, explicit style to describe a one night sexual encounter.

I would prefer a less explicit poem,

but this is a strong work of its form.

If the reader likes graphic sex then enjoy this one.

I might only suggest the author take another look at "stench",

and at the line, "we smoke some weed I've brought along".

Perhaps it could be shortened to better fit the brusqueness of the rest of the poem lines.

okay again, just my singular opinion. You have such incredible use of the language, I mean fortuna favors the bold..... amazing. but then I get lost in all the vulva and clit and cock and cum and cum again not that I do not like all of that but I would much rather do it than read about it, I want more of the lines, um the one about the leather skirt, sheer fabric, the ones that take my mind to the cumming and cocks without shoving them in my face...figuratively. You have such talent and do not need the graphics to take us where you want us. I hope this makes sense. You are a great writer and I enjoy and respect your work enough to write this reply when I "should" be bonding with my family....