- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Freedom
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Sit and wait time has no meaning,
here in this place of solitude
eyes see wraiths and ghosts
mingled motes of dust
a sepia picture of long ago.
Moon comes down and moans
and Sun explodes behind my eyes
majesty shattered to all eternity
I cry out orgasmic, hot in her place
to see her fall from grace.
I fly into my dream or madness?
You cannot reach me here
it is freedom.
- COMMENTS
unpredictablebijoualmost 16 years agoreally stretching nicely in this one. I notice that your skill with form poetry really gives you grace and an incisive voice when you work in more flexible forms. Nice!
ohhh_liviaabout 16 years agoIt is beautiful. I have one suggestion-- lose the "all" in front of eternity.
best wishes,
oli
LeBrozabout 16 years agoThis has quite a punch to it; you know it's coming but still it's like you've been taken by surprise.
Angelineabout 16 years agoI love the images and the way the pacing shifts from languid to urgent in keeping with the theme. Always a pleasure to read you, my friend. :-)
Your poem has been recommended in the New Poems Review thread on Literotica's Poetry Feedback and Discussion forum. Thanks for the read!
