Grains

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This old woman’s body,
With bones and hair
Thinning, with
Stones forming, and
Mind going, still
Pulses with an
Undeniable energy.

A bag of sand,
Punctured at the bottom,
Still retains a few grains
Even when the flow
Grows slow.

Can these few grains of
Life sustain this
Caricature of the
Me I know?

Or should I
Simply
Let them go?

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LeBrozLeBrozalmost 16 years ago
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Bridget69Bridget69about 19 years ago
The human condition.

I'm sorry to hear of your many health issues. This poem really speaks of ongoing vitality and positive spirit even when the body becomes sluggish.

sandspikesandspikeabout 19 years ago
I love it as is

The rhyme fits in fine with me and the weakness of the

ending fits the condition and question she (or you) have.

I like it as a 'question' poem we ask ourselves as we grow

older.

BluePoetBluePoetabout 19 years ago
Not a bad a poem

The beginning stanza is good, then the quality lessens. The rhymes at the end of the second stanza don't particulary work in this piece. The ending needs to be more than a whimper.

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