- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Hurdles
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Life is filled with hurdles
You and I
We’ve crossed many alone
And we will cross
Many more
Before at last
Our souls
Are at peace
And we find
That final happiness
That rests
In US
Do not dread sharing
Your hurdles with me
With open arms I accept
The challenges we face
Those together and those apart
For you are my true love
And I yours
And near or far
The day will come
When we are together
- COMMENTS
sheawaitstrueloveabout 11 years agoAuthorApparently neither of you have ever found true love. I promise you he is as real as - as real as - anyone else you've ever met. He just doesn't talk to me right now. But that doesn't mean he's not real. And it doesn't mean I'm not his true love. Just because he hasn't exactly told me I am doesn't mean it's not true, it just means - it just means he hasn't had the chance to yet. You gotta have faith.
You're right though, hurdles should be jumped, I should have thought of that, sorry for the mistake.
AmusedMusingsabout 11 years ago(I'm assuming this is a chick) seems a little off balance...have you read her other stuff? This might all be in her head...no offense to you, dear author. Your stuff is... humorous, but seriously, girlfriend, I think you may need to take some deep breaths and think about something else for awhile. Try writing poems about trees or clouds or something not quite so...cliche.
erectus123about 11 years agotoo personal for the public, just a few comments,i.e. a "hurdle" is not crossed, it is jumped, you may cross a river but you must jump a hurdle or else foul out which does not seem your message; also,
"Our souls
Are at peace
And we find
That final happiness
That rests
In US"
I imagine "US" should be "us", otherwise you are talking location. However these lines add a funerary note that I am not sure you wish to convey. Also, it is perhaps unfounded to refer to one's self as the true love of an absent party. It is more becoming to have that person make that claim but we all live in hope.....
