- Non-Erotic Poetry
- I thought of nothing
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I thought of nothing
I thought of nothing
while watching
a mountain rise
trees sway
the river run
the wind cross a meadow
I thought of nothing
while a flock
of birds flew
over a patch
of colorful flowers
under a cloud's shadow
I thought of nothing
till I thought
...of you
- COMMENTS
dcpoet44over 18 years agofrom another angle. perhaps all the things that you have described up to the ending was merely like in the sub-conscious (mindlessly present) and then when you say - until i thought of you just leaves that a bit more poignant than all of the other stuff that you mentioned prior. that is my take on it.
sackover 18 years agoBut I'm not totally convinced you need the last line. Better to let the reader fill in who or what is being thought of, depending on his own experiences?
LeBrozover 18 years agoWhar woman wouldn't like to hear,
"I thought of nothing
till I thought
...of you."
Another good write.
