- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Imprisoned
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In the end,
I felt the damage,
A wounded heart,
Lay inside of me.
I must hide and protect it.
I could not stand for him to see.
Tenderly,
I slowly wrapped it;
Layer upon layer,
One by one.
When it became a tight cocoon,
I knew that I was done.
Time went on,
In certainty.
Safe inside,
Alone I dwelt.
No one could do me harm
Of that I had no doubt.
Then one day,
You came, and tried to draw me out
With gentle words and
Thoughtful deeds
In the fallow field, of my mind
You sowed your many seeds.
With caring,
Encouragement,
Time and calm resolve.
You came to make me see,
The layers are my prison.
There’s more to give and I held the key.
- COMMENTS
LeBrozabout 17 years agoVery nice but the emotional level comes across as the same from beginning to end. A small suggestion — the part of the poem that's more about the pain should be as stark and bare as possible; try to see how many words you can cut; be ruthless in excising as many words as possible.
My Erotic Trailabout 17 years agono one can 'drive' you crazy if you hold the keys (~_~) thanks for the read!
