- Non-Erotic Poetry
- In My Mind's Eye
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Click hereIn my mind's eye
There is a darkness
A black hole of emptiness
It weaves its way through my thoughts
Possessing my very soul
How do I escape it
Before the madness takes over
I try to hide but it finds me
There is no release
I'm caught in its web
The poison consumes me
Why won't it let go
Drifting aimlessly at sea
The waters pull me under
I attempt to stay afloat
But it is futile to struggle
For in my mind's eye
The darkness spreads like a cancer
Lost in a maze
As I try to hold on
The life preserver is slipping
The illusion takes over
As insanity creeps in
There is no hope for me now
- COMMENTS
sackover 18 years agosuch as the black hole statement. I am less taken by:
I'm caught in its web
The poison consumes me
which comes off as more cliche
This poem could be a little shorter, which probably would make it all the more powerful.
Anonymousover 18 years agoI don't have the skills to do this like you do with poetry, so I try to do it with prose. I should have a story coming out in a day or so "Long Gone Lonesome Blues". Let me know what you think of the ending!
This brought out really deep emotions!
Thanks!
