Non-Erotic PoetryIncongruityI'm not sure
that we align
given your infinite
love
and my very finite
attention.
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Ouch!
Pithy, precise, very sharp, cutting! Each word is strictly necessary. Very very good!
The tone that comes through from "my very finite attention" is one of impatience. Is this what you meant? An alternate meaning would be given by " my too finite attention" - a slightly kinder one, but possibly not what you wanted to convey.more...
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