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Click herelittle things that kill:
the mosquito as you walk across a slightly slick log bridge,
the missed turn into the Hilton that sends you onto a rainy freeway,
the torn grocery bag that contains both your weekly bread and Torani irish cream syrup,
the instinctual but definitely not intended smile,
the tiny doubt in a time of ecstacy,
the almost dropped bong,
the lost flashlight during the dark winter months,
slightly frost-bit fingers,
the burnt latte,
the running toilet.
The future of the world hangs on a hangnail.
little things that please:
when Modest Mouse's "Float On" comes on at the beginning of a road trip,
the perfectly chosen new couches in the library: subtle forest green with red, orange and purple leaves,
Mom's gift of a simple black phone covered with heart stickers.
The world turns on the point of a good ball-point pen.
So few see that every event in our lives holds limitless possiblities in the outcome. It's the little things that truely shape our lives. Bravo. Oh, and be careful with that bong.
S&F
Really liked the individual emphasis paid to all those little moments we usually never take the time to notice. Very sobering.
again wow, I would say take out some unneeded words, work the verses a little...your imagery, analogies are perfect and snap a whip with each mention and the way you ended it...definately a "stop and think" poem, feel, remember, breath. thank you
While I think breaking this poem up into stanzas will give it more power, I do appreciate the dynamism of the moments described. This is a thinking poem, that makes us stop and realize it is the small things that make up life and living... do we see it or are we too busy running towards tomorrow?
Nice images with a strong message..
Du~
Mentioned in the Sunday reviews..