- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Jericho
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Click hereYou don’t have to demand, I’ll surrender for you.
I’ll crawl to you and beg for you.
I’ll give up to you what I’ve denied everyone else.
I’ll be anything you need me to be.
And when you hate me for being yours,
Despise me for dropping all my walls,
And when I have nothing left in me
To defend against you, what then?
- COMMENTS
Dick_Ticklesabout 16 years agoThe metaphor of Jericho does work very well in the theme of this poem. The walling in to protect you from harm and the tearing down of those walls that may result in total devestaion.
The Israelites burned the city and everything in it and for over 400 years Jericho lay in ruins until Heil of Bethel rebuilt the city. I like the idea of the circling of the walls however in the context of the story of Jericho the circling and music was the intrument of the citys doom.
Quote ". The Lord spoke to Joshua telling him to march around the city once every day for six days with the seven priests carrying ram's horns in front of the ark. On the seventh day they were to march around the city seven times and the priests were to blow their ram's horns. This Joshua did, and he commanded his people not to give a war-cry until he told them to do so. On the seventh day, after marching around the city the seventh time, the priests sounded their ram's horns, and Joshua ordered the people to shout. The walls of the city collapsed, and the Israelites were able to charge straight into the city. The city was completely destroyed, and every man, woman, and child in it was killed."
darthjserover 16 years agoGive and sacrifice, but we all have wants and needs, don't we? I loved, and love too of myself, and in the end a balance has to be struck ... ...
KOLKOREover 16 years agoTaking Jericho to be your main image is a wonderful idea. Still, without being too pedantic about it I wish you looked a little closer at the basic details of the story (other than the falling of the walls) and then used them. How about resurrecting the walls, then doing "Jericho II"? You know, in poetry we can do it! There was a seduction narrative, there was the long circling of the city (you) and the noise (musical courting?) and so on and so forth...
