- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Last Words
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Click hereI have thought about it, but have given up hope
that anything remains in your soul or heart
besides emptiness. But they say them’s the breaks.
Guess they might be right; you’ve had so many breaks,
second chances and do-overs sparking hope
that you might find space for me within your heart.
That was when I thought you had that sort of heart,
open, loving, and willing to avoid breaks
in others. A wellspring of care as well as hope.
When all is said and done, I hope your heart breaks.
- COMMENTS
pelegrinoover 10 years agoI agree and sympathize with the sentiments expressed, but empty hearts don't break.
Five, nevertheless!
Kobaover 10 years agoI liked this! The last line packs quite a punch after a bit of equivocating in the first stanzas. Very effective. Well done!
UnderYourSpellover 10 years agoA tritina yes? and a good one at that, where the repetitions don't crowd out or detract from the poignancy of the poem
greenmountaineerover 10 years agoThe male equivalent of the "female scorned." I like the fractured grammar of the ending in the first stanza and beginning of the second; felt visceral; wish it continued through the rest of the poem until the last last line, which, as it was, was a passive voice "said and done," until a scornful, active definitive one.
