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Click hereIf the world owes each body a wage,
why do many strive
keeping minds and heart fit,
submitting, in their soul,
to a higher will?
The work weary know a sweeter sleep
than those who fall
into bed exhausted
through avoidance of labor,
yours is a longer row to hoe.
Lie down amidst the soiled linen
on your smelly bed.
The Son shall come to you,
if He really wants your love,
to prove that He is worthy.
The serpent whip shall flay you,
after you've rested
all your days and wasted
all your nights, eating
the fruit from another's tree.
Get up and move, while free to choose
which path you wish to follow.
The snakes await your slothful soul
in the seventh circle,
since you are too lazy to walk away.
Good job, Champ! So many don't get this... but it all comes due in the end. Thanks, kiddo!
a subtle request..i'm not sure i could be so nice with this message.
lovely flow..
i know you killed me but i'm a pussy cat..nine lives included..i'm back! ~grinzzz~ xo
Excellent write, champagne-- gets the message across without having to get too literal, yet is not convuluted or subtle-- you met in the middle, directing us through invitation, not force. Wonderful. I think this might be my favorite of yours so far.
It took me three reads to figure out the title...duh.
Very nice, makes a point without being pushy. Good phrasing and a very fine work overall.