- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Masks Melt Away (Ghazal)
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Click hereI hear the whispers in the night
echoing strange realities.
In the light of a liar's moon,
mysterious shadows haunt me.
Midnight puddles the street light glow,
lovers float between dark and light.
For a moment masks melt away,
dripping to small corners of us.
The sunrise flows in barren streets
as paper truths are swept away.
I heard the whispers in the night:
quiet voices in masquerade.
- COMMENTS
Bill Dadaabout 19 years agoIt feels like Mardi Gras vibrating into an alternate reality. I also really loved these two lines:
For a moment masks melt away,
dripping to small corners of us.
TY,
BD
Anonymousabout 19 years agoI agree no need for the mention of the form used here... maybe an end note at the bottom of the poem ... with an explanation of the style... always a good learning tool. This is a beautiful whisper of romantic notions... I liked the metaphors used as well as the soft glow that surrounds the wording..
Du Lac~
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dcpoet44about 19 years agoand i believe the title is stronger without the ghazal, unless there is something i'm not catching. but these two lines particular stands out the most for me:
For a moment masks melt away,
dripping to small corners of us.
twelveooneabout 19 years agoGlancing at this, I expected it to be real bad, it's not. It's very good. You are in dangerous territory, with so many stock images, but adroitly miss most cliches. Very nicely done.
Now:
explain to me why it is a ghazal. And do think it would be better without that in the title, but that is just my personal prefence.
