- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Memories from the Past
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Click hereThere in the mind lies the key,
Forever brings you back to me.
From ancient memories resurrect,
The love and friend you won’t forget.
Another time, another place,
Yet we always see the face.
Of ones we held once so dear,
And forever embrace oh so near.
Whispers come from the past,
Faces appear out of the mask.
What once was lost, now is found,
Once so bonded cannot be unbound.
True love and friendship infinitely last,
Though time and space may seem so vast.
Words said, you will not soon forget,
The path we follow has been set.
Until the time we meet once more,
Our souls are connected to the core.
Time will inevitably cause change,
But the love and loyalty will remain.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 20 years agothis rocks, the poem is great. and it's not so much about form as it is getting a message across, so forget about flow and rhyme and listen to what the woman has to say not critique her use of form and flow. just feel the poem.
scorprose7about 20 years agoAuthorWords do not have to be spelled alike to sound similar and fit enough to a rhyme. In fact Mr. Shakespeare himself, whom I absolutely love, did not have perfect rhyme in all his stanzas. As for the flow, I have rewritten it several times. Perhaps the first was the best, I will revisit that. Yes friendship is important, but this poem more was inspired by missing my mother who died when I was 9 years old. It's about the memories, love, and friendship we have with loved ones that remains even when we are separated by death or distance. Perhaps I can make that more clear. Thank you for your comments I appreciate feedback. :-)
YDDabout 20 years agoYou have a steady rhyme going for the entire poem
and then you drop it for one line, why?
How does the change strengthen the work?
You also do not pay enough attention to the rhythm of the lines.
True friendship is very valuable and deserves the best of efforts.
Think about it and perhaps consider a rewrite to smooth the poem's flow.
Good luck!
