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Click hereThin walls reveal, too well,
the aspirations of my neighbors.
Quiet moans mingle
with the drone of TV,
a strange mélange of real
and imagined eroticism.
As their headboard
bangs a jumbled tattoo,
I join them, gasping
like a hooked carp at our shared
moment of completion.
I wonder if they
search for a tissue,
too.
[A special 'Thank You' to Angeline, who generously provided some much needed editing.]
it makes me reflect back sometime ago in hotel too. but i am not going to go any further with that. it's a perfect piece that many can relate too. it's the ending that i love the most as shown below:
I wonder if they
search for a tissue,
too.
***
nice job!!!......don
Especially at this part,
"As their headboard
bangs a jumbled tattoo,
I join them, gasping
like a hooked carp at our shared
moment of completion."
I really enjoyed the originality of this work:
quote:
As their headboard
bangs a jumbled tattoo,
I join them, gasping
like a hooked carp at our shared
moment of completion
Just what I love a writer seeks out to describe the ordinary in an original and extra ordinary vision...use of some great rhetorical weaving!
Du Lac
mentioned in the Sunday reviews...
...in some other hotel room, an inadvertant audio-eur. This was well done. Thanks.
Tess