- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Missing Pieces
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I always ask myself
Why I became too blind
Made up such excuses
Who Believed all your lies
I thought you really loved me
Everytime you hold my hand
I thought you really want me
You only used my heart
There's a big difference
between love and mistake
What we had was over
it was not even there
I should have seen the signs
But I was not even looking
I should have thrown the key
When you tried to break in
I should have let you see
You played a very stupid game
Now all I got are missing pieces
The missing pieces of your heart
You thought you could stay forever
When you had played the part
Now all I got are missing pieces
The missing pieces of your soul
You thought you could play forever
I threw your puzzle on the floor
Now all I got are missing pieces
I can't play your game anymore
I already let you go
Water under the bridge
I will make it flow
Broken heart's in tears
I can never tell
But I know time will heal the pain
I can never tell
But I know my heart will love again
- COMMENTS
honybipolaabout 6 years agoAuthorI totally appreciate all the nice feedback and comments guys...@exfireman...for the love, yeah ton of thanks, love your work too; @tazz317...well, hope all the pieces fit in your story, dig a plot or three...you're the better writer anyway...;@Orangesandapples...your story on the other hand has so much feeling and emotions that it's easy to lose yourself into your characters...; @HaydenDLinder...gee! kind words aren't wasted...I hope I got half of your skill with such great ideas...I might take it to heart though....
HaydenDLinderabout 6 years agoOK. So, I like this poem. I don't love it but I think its got potential. I think you certainly have the skills to be great at this but you need more practice. That's actually a self serving comment because more practice for you, means posting here and then WE get to read them.
That being said, I stay away from poetry myself because it's tough. Word choices in fiction are bad enough but in poetry? Yeah, they're crucial. Anyway, would love to see more from you.
Have fun:)
Orangesandapplesabout 6 years agoHey this is really good! It's nice to see those feelings put into words.
