- Erotic Poetry
- My Neighbor lady
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Click hereThe lady across the street is lonely I think
Her hubby's at work and the last child just moved
Each morning she'll open the garage after leaving the house
Then she'll enter her yard in straw hat, shorts and nice blouse
She'll carry a rake and can for clippings
But when she spots a neighbor she always shouts Hi
And if they're not busy will hurry to talk
And cross the yard at a very brisk walk
Any neighbor is welcome and offers diversion
And today I've failed to notice her behind the bush or wall
As I open the front door lock it and move to my car
I'm not avoiding her its... not my thought by far
And so the next thing I hear is her fast step
Behind me I sense her and she's saying Hi
As I turn to see her and she's coming up my walk
She's eager to say Hi and eager to talk
Today she wears conservative starched shorts and white blouse
And I see the blouse peaked and her long legs tanned
She smiles and says how much neighbors have missed me
And asks how I am cause she's concerned but says we
That something might happen where I couldn't call out
And might suffer or lay abandoned in my empty house
I watch as she talks and I yearn to see more
As she talks my eyes move and begin to explore
My thoughts think back to my bed or new sofa
Would she come in or welcome my voice wondering
What lies beneath that blouse and those shorts so nice
And about those long legs and calves built to entice.
- COMMENTS
WickedEvealmost 20 years agoYou have some good material to work with in the poem. I don't think the ABCC rhyming pattern is particularly appealing, though.
How about writing part two of this poem, where the neighbors get together. Maybe you'd enjoy trying free verse, or if you like rhyme, perhaps, ABCB or ABAC, either rhyming the 1st and 3rd lines or the 2nd and 4th lines.
This is only a suggestion that I hope you find useful.
YDDalmost 20 years agoAn unusually structured poem of lust and a busybody neighbor.
Each stanza consists of two beginning lines of no rhyme nor meter.
These lines serve to introduce a rhymed couplet which comprise the last two lines of the stanza. Perhaps a good work can be made from this poem. But in its present from it is a rough and choppy read and benefit from a rewrite.
