- Non-Erotic Poetry
- My Own Created Hell
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Click hereI SLEEP IN STRANGEST COMFORT
FEEL THE SHADOWS AND THE CHILL
BITTER SWEETLY I REMEMBER
ALL THE PAIN AND ALL THE THRILL
ALL THE EMPTINESS INSIDE ME
IN DARK HOLLOWS I RESIDE
MY PAIN IS NOW MY COMFORT
AND IN SOLITUDE I HIDE
THE WALLS THAT NOW SURROUND ME
AS THEY SHELTER AND PROTECT
NO ONE HEARS ME SCREAMING
AND NO ONE DARE SUSPECT
DEAR GOD PLEASE GIVE ME SHELTER
TAKE AWAY THE HURT AND PAIN
LET ME SLEEP FOREVER
AND FORGET HIS FACE AND NAME
I FUNCTION AND I SMILE
AS EACH DAY I STRUGGLE MORE
I WANT THE WORLD TO GO AWAY
AND BOTHER ME NO MORE
LET ME LIVE IN SILENCE
AND IN DARKNESS LET ME DWELL
MY COMFORT IS THE EMPTINESS
OF MY OWN CREATED HELL
- COMMENTS
loorsladyover 13 years agoAuthorThank you for grasping the intent of my use of capitals. I love the feedback for what I write and thank you for reading my submissions.. :-)
William smythover 13 years agoAfter readin your poem, it is easy for me to understand your choice of all caps. It is a very effective way to call attention to your state of mind.
loorsladyover 13 years agoAuthorI appreciate your critique...but the poem was written purposely in CAPS, for a very specific reason. To capture the readers attention and I felt the need to yell it to exercise my inner demons. If it was irritating to read I do apologize but CAPS made it all the more cathartic to write in that style.
PoetGuyover 13 years agoTHE ALL-UPPERCASE MUST (SURELY?) BE A MISTAKE? IF NOT, I WOULD STRONGLY SUGGEST YOU CHANGE TO THE MORE CONVENTIONAL UPPER AND LOWER CASE. ALTHOUGH POET GUY DISLIKES THE AFFECTATION OF ALL-LOWERCASE, EVEN THAT WOULD BE LESS IRRITATING TO THE READER.
Otherwise, the poem has a fairly nice 18th-19th century sound to it. Good effort.
