- Erotic Poetry
- My Surrender
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my eyes follow you silently
my heart yearns for you secretly
my body aches for you urgently
my mind goes places it's never been
my soul has urges it's never had
my deepest darnkess i've never seen
a word or a gesture is all it takes
your hand on the collar makes me shake
my body afire, it trembles and quakes
these feelings confuse me
they scare me to death
it's been so long
i can't catch my breath
these desires can no longer
be denied their birth
my soul, my heart...
my body, my darkest desires...
my everything, my being...
Burns with your fires...
but ...
i've been alone for so long that...
my soul fears you...
my heart fears you...
while the deepest darkness inside...
craves your commands, your touch, your lips...
my deepest darkest desire is...
as
my deepest darkest fear is...
my surrender...
- COMMENTS
Sweet_Shayover 19 years agoThis was really nice.
I hung on your every word. Such a great build up.
PLEASE do more.
XOXOX's ~HOT_little_Twinkie_n_TX~
jd4georgeover 19 years ago...was wonderfully captured in these lines:
"i've been alone for so long that...
my soul fears you...
my heart fears you...
while the deepest darkness inside...
craves your commands, your touch, your lips...
my deepest darkest desire is...
as
my deepest darkest fear is...
my surrender..."
You captured a sentiment, that sadly, I've heard a lot of women speak of. Men, unfortunately, con their way around it. The eloguence of your want is second only to your derserving of that touch.
I hope you got it.
cummybearover 19 years agoYou've done such an exquisite job of capturing very complex emotions... struggling with the internal battle between lust and the insecurity that comes with being alone for so long. I felt what you are writing here, and that's what makes this such a wonderful piece. Everyone can relate to what you have here. Please keep up the good work!! I promise to keep reading
average ginaover 19 years agoI've read some erotic poetry before and this was so good! I felt the submission, excitement and fear in that poem. It moved and flowed well to me. Very good! Looking forward to seeing more!
average gina
Anonymousover 19 years agoAs with all great poetry it touched me, and made me think. I think therefore I feel. Beautiful
