- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Mythical Love
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Comely Nymph in nature's sway
a Satyr now come round yon way
A heart that he doth truly give
two as one could surely live
hoof and horn merging now
as seed will surely follow plow
souls aflame in ancient fire
burning now co-mixed desires
two hearts now burst as one
brighter than any noonday sun
union joined beneath the sky
sever one and both shall die
ever climbing, epic bliss
now my love, taste my kiss
- COMMENTS
Apple_of_Edenabout 3 years agoI enjoyed reading your poem and the picture your words painted. It read to me as a love poem, but still it contained more than love. I read sadness, loss, and heartbreak too.
Thank you for sharing your work.
Guywhoreadsthisstuffabout 5 years agoI do like your poem. It's the fantasy we all strive for in our relationships and some do find it...for a while. It's unfortunate that the fire doesn't last long enough. Of course some are able to rekindle flame but, only if both are willing. Usually by that time though one or both are.... recommitted elsewhere. I've always been a romantic and believe or believed in "Us against the world no matter what". Twice divorced enough said.
Anonymousover 8 years agoDecent images.
Only issue is overuse of the word "now"
Removing it might change some of the "urgency", but it doesn't add as much to the "passion" as you may have hoped. I suggest changing from present tense, to (recent) past tense. Then you will have more alternatives and can avoid reusing the same word.
A few other suggestions:
Go ahead and pluralize fire(s) to match desires, and try "comingled" instead of "co-mixed".
But in any case, not a bad effort. And Thanks!
