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        the thread
        wraps around
        a day after night after day after...
        and Ms, as hard as I try
        I still steal, my crime,
        your every gesture, word, sound --
        declare me not sound of my mind
        but be careful, you being on my mind
        provides unknown to me grace and light


wlodzimierz holsztynski ©
         1992

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Maria2394Maria2394about 18 years ago
how beautiful!

and SJ probably wont like me saying that, I wont apologize :)

I like the ending, yes I do. Its well stated and romantic.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 18 years ago
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These first 5 lines make the poem for me. Very cummingsesque especially in line 3 in the loving language that itself is twisted around as if dizzy with love.

"declare me not sound of my mind"

"the thread

wraps around

a day after night after day after...

and Ms, as hard as I try

I still steal, my crime,

your every gesture, word, sound --

declare me not sound of my mind"

The last two lines fell short, I would like to order a different ending please.

~anna

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