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mxslicer
mxslicer
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Not seen to be understood
Deadened desire never ceasing its return, always sated
Ignites the flame already burning.
Taking in, chewing up, spitting out.

Heart not still, motionless it lays.
On and on leaving the place, it always looks the same.
Through the window, sun just below the horizon.
There, never its light.

Empty decay, yearning heft of fullness.
Thoughts not fathomed, filled in nothing.
Ceaselessly addicted, painful
Choosing, the choice already made.

Unpaid crimes of this day.
A debt, known, not kept at bay.
Crowded, this empty place.
Still air, gray sky, not unsurpassed this day.

No tears for this thirst, no radiance penetrates the shadow.
Grain of sand, buried deep in the layers.
Under the perpetually thickening scare tissue.
Ignored, never departing.

Pain not ceding control.
Slowly, gains its strength.
Feeding, yet needs no sustenance.
Strength it makes, desiring weakness.

Deepening cracks in the façade.
Refusing notice, crashing down.
Lifting fallen stones, heavy they are.
Inflicting wounds, never to heal.

Nothing gained in this game.
Never ceasing to play.
Every turn, a piece not taken back.
Still waiting for the next.

mxslicer
mxslicer
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mxslicermxsliceralmost 20 years agoAuthor
Thanks Jim

Taking into account you suggestions. I've rewritten this poem. I think it's an improvement.

Thanks!

jthserrajthserraalmost 20 years ago
I feel the intense emptiness

in this poem, a feeling that I think you could heighten even more with some trimming. If you go through your lines and take out all but the most essential message I think the impact of the emotion, the nothingness will be overwhelming. You have a very good poem here, that I think, with some prodigious trimming you can work it into something really special. Good work...

jim : )

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