- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Of Unfinished Things
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Click hereWe lead a life
of unfinished things
plates pushed away
ambitions forgotten
words never read
never written or said
magi penciled on a panel
requiems crossed out on the page
stillborn Silmarillions and half-made cathedrals
loves unspoken; hearts we've broken.
Haunted by their presence
bent by their weight
I touch my fingers
to the screen
and remind
myself
life
is
an unfinished thing.
- COMMENTS
Seanathonalmost 9 years agoAuthorThanks for the comment, legerdemer.
Just like magi and requiems, cathedrals was a specific reference and, in this case, referred to Cologne Cathedral. The cathedral is the largest Gothic church in Northern Europe, has the second-tallest spires, and took more than six hundred years to complete (after sitting unfinished for nearly four centuries).
Thanks again for the read ~ Seanathon
legerdemeralmost 9 years agoThis was a nice read, a universal sigh...
A couple of thoughts...
- 'all' in the first line is unnecessary, and it's absence would make the line shorter and contribute to the visual pattern
- 'to the sky' in the longest line is also unnecessary - I wonder if you simply added for effect, of turning a Romanesque church into a Gothic one; cathedrals would still stick out without its help, and the line I think might read more smoothly and be better integrated with the rest
It spoke to me intimately.
