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Click herethe where and when
forfeit,
forgotten.
the what and why
passed by all petty fear,
to skim the arch
of skin and sigh
and sing a last goodbye
before tangent
lost contact
and ballast of burdens
steered clear
now,
doubt is faint,
a far away trace
of lost restraint,
all vision, your face
atmosphere,
your exhale passes
an impossible nothing
to fill this empty void,
breathes life into
this hollow shell
once more
and lifts this
shallow hell
ashore
by clearing space
and cleaning mind,
extracts the venom
patient, kind
and leaves,
for now,
nothing
but this
absolution,
nexus of two,
my sanctuary
you
hollow shell/shallow hell damn, I like that. An intricate wordplay here... I had to read it three times but yes, I think I see. You were there, right next to hell, and for no comprehendible reason, you are saved, drawn into sanctuary. Well done.
jim : )
I like some of the phrasing and the thoughts that are engendered within this poem, but I do not understand the connection of the title to the body of the work.
You have written with more clarity.
Liar,
I absolutely adore how you take the 'out there' and make it revelent to the 'right here'. It makes even the white spaces between the words take on significant meaning. As always, brilliant.