- Erotic Poetry
- org as m
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she melted into the realization
after twenty five years
after three lovers
she was going to have an orgasm
the heavy body above her
the cock thrusting into her
the one hand on her hip
the other gripping a leg
the confidence
she was reminded of the time
driving mid-winter,
hitting an ice patch,
the lack of control as the car
spun lazily around
the lack of control
the slowing of time
and as it approached,
it was as if
she were made of kindling
the rush of startled birds
abandoning a tree
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comments, critiques, deconstructions are entirely welcome
- COMMENTS
RhymeFairyover 18 years agoSteady on ...
Very nice * Ride * here.
Approach with caution ~
*grins*
Great flow, and the imagery ...
Untouchable and fresh ~
More Plaese ~
Anonymousover 18 years agoI love the metaphor here, and the last two lines are gorgeous. I have never heard it described this way, and it works!
"and as it approached,
it was as if
she were made of kindling
the rush of startled birds
abandoning a tree"
you might consider changing the title, it is too common (around here at least) I did not read it at first as I thought oh another orgasm poem. Thanks to the New Poems reveiws I gave it a shot and was glad I did!
~annaswirls
Anonymousover 18 years agoThis is better than good! Whodathunk I'd say that? Thank you, Mischievous!
Reltneover 18 years agoUnusual set up and metaphor, and a great ending!
Excellent erotic poem.
Thank you for the read!
