Paints on Canvas

Poem Info
47 words
3.8
3.8k
0
Poem does not have any tags
Share this Poem

Font Size

Default Font Size

Font Spacing

Default Font Spacing

Font Face

Default Font Face

Reading Theme

Default Theme (White)
You need to Log In or Sign Up to have your customization saved in your Literotica profile.
PUBLIC BETA

Note: You can change font size, font face, and turn on dark mode by clicking the "A" icon tab in the Story Info Box.

You can temporarily switch back to a Classic Literotica® experience during our ongoing public Beta testing. Please consider leaving feedback on issues you experience or suggest improvements.

Click here
Lady Lay
Lady Lay
24 Followers

Paints on canvas
Hands entwined
You said you loved me
Then declined

Now you mumble
Moan and groan
You set me free, Love
All alone

I flew above the icy clouds
Swooped down on fields below
My nests now sit on mountain peaks
Encased in heaven's glow

Lady Lay
Lady Lay
24 Followers
Please rate this poem
The author would appreciate your feedback.
  • COMMENTS
Anonymous
Our Comments Policy is available in the Lit FAQ
Post as:
Anonymous
3 Comments
sandspikesandspikealmost 20 years ago
Keep it coming

A nice short work showing deeper emotions than many longer

poems. It sounds like you are better off flying for awhile.

Smooth poem as it changed gears and imagery.

jthserrajthserraalmost 20 years ago
This one seemed like two poems

the first two stanzas worked okay together, but the last stanza became more, much stronger than the first part of the poem. The strngth of the poem is in that last stanza, if you could carry that stanza in a poem of its own it would really shine...

jim : )

YDDYDDalmost 20 years ago
Paints with words

The words flow smoothly in cadence in this poet's first offering.

The thoughts and phrases are not new,

but the final lines combine to add a fresh image.

Keep writing.

edit: "heavens" is possessive.

Share this Poem