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Click herePaints on canvas
Hands entwined
You said you loved me
Then declined
Now you mumble
Moan and groan
You set me free, Love
All alone
I flew above the icy clouds
Swooped down on fields below
My nests now sit on mountain peaks
Encased in heaven's glow
A nice short work showing deeper emotions than many longer
poems. It sounds like you are better off flying for awhile.
Smooth poem as it changed gears and imagery.
the first two stanzas worked okay together, but the last stanza became more, much stronger than the first part of the poem. The strngth of the poem is in that last stanza, if you could carry that stanza in a poem of its own it would really shine...
jim : )
The words flow smoothly in cadence in this poet's first offering.
The thoughts and phrases are not new,
but the final lines combine to add a fresh image.
Keep writing.
edit: "heavens" is possessive.