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Pay Up

Steam curls from a Styrofoam cup
hot chocolate and marshmallows
stir her saliva. The cherry
chequered table is steadied
by folded cardboard shoved
under one leg,
and Steely Dan plays on the jukebox
down the back corner of Becky’s.
A chair screams, metal on concrete,
as an unwashed body shudders
on cold ground in the alley.
A growing red stain surges
to the storm water and a silver stiletto
protrudes from a fat gurgling gut.
She gulps the milky chocolate,
and pockets the rate he owed.

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KOLKOREKOLKOREover 16 years ago
A poem to remember

The imagery works to bring home the pov of the implied narrator with the heightened sensory alertness and irritability as explained at the end. A poem to remember.

lorencinolorencinoover 16 years ago
Anything I say

is not going to do justice to this gem.

LeBrozLeBrozalmost 17 years ago
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,000 poems.

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Bill DadaBill Dadaabout 18 years ago
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A powerful tale told with amazing econmy.

ty,bd

AnonymousAnonymousover 18 years ago
Tightly focused

This really has an impact. You have a way of showing the picture... in this case almost too well!

Great job, well deserving of the "E"

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