- Erotic Poetry
- Perfection~
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Click heredew upon petals
glistening drips
fragrance divine
inhaling essence
tangy sweet
silky smooth
feather touches
buzzing within
fluttering heart
nectar aflow
pollinations course
plucking the blooms
taking the time
gently loving
that perfect rose~
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 18 years agoyes indeed,
you must be
that perfect rose;
and I must start
to my study of
horticulture.
sackover 19 years agoI especially like the "pollinations course" line, a real masterstroke!
keyen31over 19 years agothis was a really good shot at what you were aiming for. i think you could have taken it a little more to a peek, just to lead one on more. also, the pluck, kind of took a little of the feel out. it was good though
Reltneover 19 years agoThis is the most interesting poem of yours that I have so far read.
You really do seem to be learning and improving from all the reading you have been doing!
Do take twelveoone's comment about structure and balance seriously.
You can make this an even stronger poem. :rose:
Lazarusover 19 years agonice imagry hun, reminds me of the pink floyd orchid image in "the wall"
