Pig

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demure101
demure101
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Lost on the sullen moors one rainy night
when on the air wild autumn wailed, my torch
and dog for comfort, I came down the hill
and chanced upon the bleakest place of all -
a circle in the bitter bracken, scorched
where once red blood had spouted from a wound,
the lonely spot where on a morning clear
mad Jeanie cut her wrists, not to be found
till one week later when her sweet young John
went fast across, in fearful mood, and vowed
that he'd be back ere nightfall. It was not
until the sun was high above the fields
that he came limping back, a frightened stare
in bulging eyes, and stammering of things
he'd seen that night. The village went to look
and found her where he'd said he'd been, and word
soon spread that he had done her wrong; the ghost
must have been waiting for him there. Since then
the scene, so full of noises, knows its mark:
a faint grey flame, a beacon in the dark
and as I saw it I turned back and ran -
it was no earthly person there that went
straight for my throat; nor was she wronged by John.
When that young fool was out one market day
I found her in, and had my will of her,
and she could just not take it in good jest
but tore her hair and raved of guilt and dread
and what would Johnny think - the bloody fool -
and took a knife and rushed out of the house.
I stood and saw her vanish down the moors
but to be found again with Johnny's aid -
I'll no more go there till her ghost is laid.

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tazz317tazz317over 11 years ago
A PIG OR A POKE

truer words should have spoke the why & what, TK U MLJ LV NV

ishtatishtatover 11 years ago
Piggy too nice?

The poem is about the narrator and what a cad he is (love that word) . If you want to make him really frightening you might have avoided giving the rapee and her true lover names. If she had remained only she, she would have remained an object in the narrator/rapists mind and her true lover might also not be named. A name makes a character human. The Pig makes these characters inadvertantly human. If you're going to write about a bastard from a first person point of view you have to get in the mind of the Pig and think and speak as him. You weren't nasty enough to be really convincing. If you wrote from Pig's point of view really convincingly you would have offended readers sensibilities and they would have given you ones and twos. Thus a four in this instance indicates okayish. Pig needs to be much nastier.

DawnJDawnJover 11 years ago
You know what I don't get?

How is it possible to get a high score on a poem that is not understood? You could make a fortune if you bottled the formula for your success! *grins*

I liked it the first time, and I still like it now. And yes, he IS a pig! That ghost needs to roast his a**!!!

DesejoDesejoover 11 years ago
Pig?

Am I missing some myth of the moors? Pig as in the narrator is a pig?

This might have worked well as part of this month's Haunted Ballad challenge (see Forum).

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