- Non-Erotic Poetry
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i want to grip you
like a circle change
cos then i get that rush of thrust
yet you wont go anywhere
but however god it seems
youre a two-seam fastball grrl
and must be thrown way monster hard
to force that tailing away
- COMMENTS
normal jeanalmost 16 years agoI have read all of your work, enjoyed most of it, but this one baffles me.
First of all, is this part--but however god it seems
youre a two-seam fastball grrl
and must be thrown way monster hard
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did you mean "good" rather than "god"?
and I hope you don't take this the wrong way, but deviations in spelling, which seem intentional, such as "grrl", "hawt" "kewl" and such, just seem so ghetto, so uneducated, especially when used in poetry.
I assume you did it on purpose and I am missing something in the poem, that is why I am asking you what you meant. If the entire work utilized words like that, maybe it would make better sense to me. Maybe it made sense to your other readers, I often miss the point in such things. Otherwise, I enjoyed the piece and enjoy you as a poet altogether. You have a great sense of humor and remind me of someone here, just cannot place who, right off.
keep writing :)
NJ
