Primate

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oneiria
oneiria
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The first fish

     We share 98% of our

to limp its way

     genes with

out of the primordial sea

     chimpanzees, who eat

saw the white billowing clouds,

     babies.

a paradise of hope.


oneiria
oneiria
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twelveoonetwelveoonealmost 13 years ago
Interesting

experiment, two lines that don't converge. These lines are know by me, how many others care? In short, you lost most of the potential readers by line two. Not developed enough, and not completely thought out.

Despite all that I left a five, I did have to stop and think.