- Erotic Poetry
- Questions in the Dark
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Can they hear us?
Over in the next room
Ears straining in the dark
Can they hear
Fingers running through soft hair
Silk sheets slipping away
Quick tiny breaths
Moist lips sliding across warm flesh?
Quick, turn on the radio…
Will Miles Davis swathe our sounds?
Can a soft trumpet
Cover a low moan?
If we match the rhythm
Will they be able to tell?
A still morning
The sun rises without a whisper
Knowing glances
Sly smiles
Across the breakfast table
Are our answers.
- COMMENTS
Lanagirlover 19 years agoLostandfounder.
How nice and peaceful this poem is, just a daily glimpse, no judgments or twists or analysis, just a moment. I like this poem very much. In only a few lines, you have perfectly captured a mood and a moment. Congratulations.
--lanagirl
Tathagataalmost 20 years agoso perhaps I'm biased
I liked it a lot
and yeah..the miles davis part gave a whole other dimension to this
Nice work
perksalmost 20 years agosimply interesting and rife with imagery and longing, and the low soft laughter of all of us who've been there. The miles davis part gives this poem a smooth slow sexy feeling that wouldn't have been there without that particular reference, I think.
twelveoonealmost 20 years agobest answered with these questions
Can a soft trumpet
Cover a low moan?
If we match the rhythm
Will they be able to tell?
nice word flow, nice vignette, nice finish
author seems to be moving into different territory, and I am impressed with his growth, so I leave it up to him to discover the areas that could be improved
for now a well earned 100
