- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Ramblings of the Lonely Man
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The darkness and the gloom
I’m looking at the blank walls
Hoping somebody will call
Waiting for a smiling face
To take me out of this place
All I can see is the emptiness
All I can feel is loneliness
Desperation attacks my heart
And it’s tearing me apart
I just don’t know what I feel
All I know is that’s it’s real
Same damn feelings every day
How can I wipe it away?
I just don’t know how I got so down
When they’re so many new people around
Acquaintances I call my friends
On them through, can I depend?
We get along well but it’s all a game
I like them all so but it’s still the same
I still find myself all alone
Despite the new faces I’ve known
I always seem to fall behind
Then I have to make it up double time
But they’re all set in their ways
And have no room for me to play
What would happen if I cry?
Would everyone pass me by?
What would happen if I was down?
Would anyone bring me around?
Or would they go another way
Because I’m such a problem today?
Maybe the problem is just me
Cause I don’t know who I should be.
Should I go and ask for more
And maybe end up being a whore
Maybe I should wait until they come to me
I’d be alone; that ain’t the key
I could be the fighter but I’d lose the fight
I could be the teacher but I’m not usually right
I could be the leader if I had some more balls
I could be the hero if I would take the fall
I could be the thief but I’d just get caught
I could take the money but I won’t be bought
I’ve got so many feeling which I can always hide
But it does me no good to keep them all inside
I know I should open up but it’s the way I am
I really want to change but I’m a stubborn man
So many people tried to drag me down
So few people have helped me come around
Sometimes all I feel is the desperation
And the loneliness and isolation
I always get hit and knocked to the floor
And I just bounce back, ready for more
But of all the emotions I feel inside
The strongest of them all is . . .
My Pride
- COMMENTS
Anonymousover 19 years agoYou have captured what many of us feel in our lives. The key is finding a way out of the darkness and into the light. The loneliness and despair you speak about is felt by the reader. A very moving poem. One critique is at some points the flow of the poem is interrupted by the staggering rythym.
Christina O. Leighover 19 years agoWow! There is so much going on here. I loved the way you ended this. Very moving piece, this is.
The only suggestion I have for you is to try to keep to the same syllable count in each line for these types of poems.
Other than that, you did great. I was really drawn in and understood all TOO well!
LilDarlinover 19 years agoWow~~!! Such feeling..imagery..depth..So much to feel in one lill poem, yet it's alll there *in your face*~~
Just loved this one. So many times we have all been there..That exact spot in time, and you told the feelings so well...More Plaese~~!!
