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- Real Time Problem
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LEMONIA / (F)LEAP EDELTRAUD => TO HAVE AND HAVE NOT/APPROPRIATIONS => (REMEMBERING A WEEK FROM HELL)
AVRA
THURSDAY MORNING (03:00)
16/1/2014
REAL TIME PROBLEM
I could never tell this story in real time,
I may do it with my music, dance and mime,
Cause its poison affected all my songs,
Its details are dispersed in many rhymes,
Up to you to travel back in your mad times,
Up to you to put each piece where it belongs.
I just write it as it comes in broken shapes,
While I'm singing, drinking, fucking, eating grapes,
Any moment of my life, any breath,
By the hell you've given me has been affected,
All unwillingly my songs have been rejected,
Cause in every one of them there was a death.
REFRAIN
This week from hell is to be lived,
And then re-lived for many times,
Unless by you it is believed,
The only way to clean your crimes.
- COMMENTS
Magnetronalmost 10 years ago'Cause' is giving me fits.
So are Lines 5 & 6 which would read much less cumbersome as:
Up to your traveling
Up to your putting
twelveoonealmost 10 years agol3 in the refrain strikes me as lame, inverted syntax and all
Cause not 'cause is a little disarming.,
anyway - this more poetry than song
Trixareforkidsalmost 10 years agoBut there are two lines that feel like lazy rhymes "eating grapes" and "clean your crimes"
And the refrain, I don't understand the "unless". What does the other person's belief have to do with the speaker's little deaths?
