Rebirth

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**And no I am not suicidal nor in danger of hurting myself or others. This is a work of fiction, nothing more**


Its cold,
Her toes tingle with the loss of feeling,
Her fingers are useless frozen digits,
Crystal blue eyes blink away one unshed tear.

Shivering slightly,
Back and forth, back and forth,
Hands creep up in an attempt to ward off the black chill,
He doesn’t Come.

Alone…her arms wrapped tight about her torso,
Numbness begins to take hold,
Vacant eyes blink faster,
The only sound is that of a lone heart beating.

Blessedly numb at last,
She feels nothing except an inner pain that won’t go away,
The blackness claims her breath, her soul, her heart,
She crumbles to the unwelcoming floor.

Alone…again…useless once more,
In that protective huddle her heart stops its frantic beating,
Her eyes fixate open, staring at her reflection of nothingness,
Large tears flow in silent rivers down her cheeks.

Unwanted, unneeded, useless,
Her clumsy hand reaches for a near by blade,
One long sure stroke conceives crimson waves,
Life lost and hopeless dreams mingle with her tears.

Nothingness…brings forth rebirth.

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LeBrozLeBrozabout 17 years ago
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This one is far and away the best you've done. Two small points — that very first word should be It's [the contraction for it is; without the apostrophe it becomes a possessive]. Not good for the only typo to be the very first word. The second point is a very minor stylistic point — place explanatory notes after the poem, not before. //corrected my own typo//

AmyfriendAmyfriendabout 17 years ago
Exceptionally..

well done..with some beautifully flowing words that had me on the edge of my seat. Thanks

wildsweetonewildsweetoneabout 17 years ago
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