- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Rhythm Method
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It’s not that you ask, but how—
can we, can we, can we
like a carpenter with a cordless drill
hanging a closet door
in a suburban tract house.
We can, of course, and will,
but I am not a 2x4,
and I’d always hoped you
were more architect than carpenter,
even, perhaps, that kind of musician
who could change tempo on the fly.
- COMMENTS
Senna Jawaover 6 years agoI've replaced the "non-erotic" label by "half-erotic and half-anti-erotic". That's what it is. The text is poetic but not flowery, it's adequate to the contents. The erotic simile "carpenter with a cordless drill" is excellent, it's poetically organic, i.e. natural and it feels now like necessary(!). And so is "tract house". The text is erotic and psychological (anti-erotic), in balance.
In addition to earlier similes, the additional "2x4" and "fly" similes provide also extra associations (outside the similes' direct meaning), where "2x4" may induce the notion of age (24 year old) and "fly" -- of pants (zipper). Thus we have not only the similes which involves a house or music but also additional linguistic joy; and all this is more(!) than a game, it is organic once again.
The text is enjoyable due to its high artistic level while at the same time it is sad, even a bit depressing, perhaps (characteristic for some of the best poetry, this juxtaposition of non-attractive prose-reality and of beauty of art).
Prose was turned into poetry.
