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Click heresac-ora
the Art of
verbal combat
rule number one
recommends advantage
terrain
it's not enough to win
arguments are struggles
of the within
to repel another's
to empower their will
two rule
choice of realms
for battle grounds
the dance of anger spun
words fired like bullets
from a gun
do four eyes see
the same sphere?
the same way
even if it were
the same day
indifference
in views
Prestige undone
rule number five
will pride survive
it was always better
to be silent than to
open your mouth and
spew your knowledge
your emotions
your limitations
patience?
but beware the swarm
the sting of truth
the majority rule
and as a rule
sack is six
listen to this
leaving unwanted spoils
in public byways
is just plain 'nasty'
mother always said
don't put your dirty
laundry out for all to
see
draws flys
it's said to catch
flies use honey
bee's precious
tribute
forum colony
working together
to enrich the world
with sweet nectar
sadly that's selective
each chamber life
in different degree
a choice to be free
a choice to disagree
bound by the same traits
to win
the favor
of the
Queen
to sac-ora this I plea~
for life is a honeycomb
can't you see
a honeycomb tree
we're writing bees
ora cutie
verbal combat
rule number sixty nine
for what left
between your teeth
today
may bite you in the ass
tomorrow
for if it is not sac-ora
the Art of verbal combat
it is a spat
a squabble
a mental rumble
eight ate hate
words are straight
from the soul
Verbal combat
rule number ten
doesn't matter who lost
or who may win
it's pride mixed with honor
respect blended with
correctness
courage to do what's right
to humble
in the house of another
to be remembered
not only for the way
we stood or stand
but the words we said
the feelings
we bred
or the tears we shed
Glad my public comments riled you up to anger enough to write a better than average poem. Of course, there is a world of difference between deliberately hurting/criticising another and honestly questioning structural/spelling/grammatical aspects of a poem. That is what I do with yours, because I do think you are open-minded enough to improve, or at least try to best realize your "Art".(sorry for the pun!)
When I look at my 550+ public comments, I realize it has been a long journey. Probably my typical "love letter" verbiage helps little, except to ego boost the authors. Guess I could have remained anonymous from the beginning, but we all learn from healthy verbal combat. Most of my thoughts are very encouraging and positive, I do tend to be much harder on poems because in my opinion, it's fatally easy to botch up a poem. Everyone hopefully strives to be better in their craft, and if you perceive in my comments a "verbal stink bomb" that incites you to more improved writing, than comrade, I shall bomb away!!
PS- Watch out for "two" and "too"! (BOOM!!)
Sack-aura